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以下のエッセイを読んで、文末にあるComposition Topic（作文テーマ）で

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ウィングローブのネイティブスタッフ・ロジャー先生がすばらしい添削をしてくれます！

PLASTIC

It is difficult for us to imagine that there was a time, just three generations ago, when virtually nothing was made of plastic. Today, it is all around us. Being soft and easily molded, it is the ultimate convenience material. Most consumer items are now at least partially made of plastic, and a great deal of what we eat and drink comes wrapped in it. A million plastic bottles are used and discarded every minute, and nearly all the plastic used for food containers and packaging is single-use plastic. So what happens to it after it is thrown away?

About half of all plastic PET bottles are collected for recycling, but in practice only about 7% of those collected are made into new bottles. The remainder are either buried in landfill sites or washed into the ocean, where they do not just disappear. Plastic takes hundreds of years to break down. In other words, nearly all the plastic that has ever been manufactured, equivalent in weight to one billion elephants, still exists somewhere in the world. 10 million tonnes of it finds its way into the sea every year. By 2050, there will be more plastic in the world's oceans than fish. Our precious sea is becoming a chemical soup, full of small fragments of plastic, which are eaten by seabirds, fish and many other creatures. Since the plastic cannot be digested, it accumulates in their bodies and eventually kills them.

If we really cared about the future of our planet, we would not allow this to happen. The consequences of dumping all this unnatural material into the environment will be catastrophic, and yet the solutions are very simple. Plastic bags could be outlawed, as in some countries, or at least customers could be made to pay for them. In the UK, when supermarket customers started to be charged the equivalent of 7.5 yen for bags, their use fell immediately by 80%. Again, we could probably make all plastic packaging materials biodegradable. And many plastic items, such as the 500 million plastic straws that are used in the United States every day, could easily be made of safer materials like paper. Urgent action needs to be taken, or the convenience of our modern lifestyle could end up costing us the earth.

COMPOSITION TOPICS

1.

In your opinion, what actions should the Japanese government take to solve the problem of plastic pollution?

2.

Give some examples of plastic items that you use in your everyday life. Which of them do you think are really necessary, and which of them could be made from materials other than plastic?

QUESTIONS　（内容理解にご利用ください）

1. What is one of the main uses of plastic?

2. Where does most of the plastic we use end up?

3. What happens to sea creatures when they eat plastic?

4. Does the writer think it is difficult to solve the problem of plastic pollution?

5. What will happen if we don't take action?

以下のエッセイを読んで、文末にあるComposition Topic（作文テーマ）で
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CHILD POVERTY

Foreign visitors to Japan are impressed by its prosperity and high standard of living. People are well dressed, their homes are clean and well-equipped, and we do not see slums in the cities, or people begging for money on the streets. Yet recent statistics show that the gap between the rich and poor in Japan has been quietly growing for years. In terms of income equality, Japan now ranks 34^th out of 41 OECD countries, and 16% of all children, including around half the children of single parents, are growing up in poverty.

Single mothers often have unstable, irregular, and low-paid jobs. This means they may not have enough money to keep their children healthy or feed them adequately, let alone pay for school lunches. Neither can they afford all the extra expenses, for things like uniforms, equipment for club activities, or field trips and excursions, that might enable their children to have normal school lives. Poor children do less well at school than their classmates, and this affects their job prospects, which then perpetuates a cycle of poverty.

It is not only Japan that is experiencing a widening wealth gap. In the UK, for example, one in four children are now living in poverty. One reason is that, although people's wages are not rising, the government is cutting welfare payments and laying off public servants, in a policy called "austerity". But famous economists like Joseph Stiglitz say that such policies do not make economies grow. Is it not possible to have an economy which works for everyone, rather than one which makes only some people richer, while consigning so many others to poverty?

COMPOSITION TOPIC

How do you think the government could make it easier for people on low incomes to raise their children? Make some policy suggestions.

QUESTIONS　　（内容の理解にご利用ください）

1. Is the wealth gap in Japan obvious to foreign visitors?

2. Why is the poverty rate so high among single-parent

families?

3. Give some reasons why poor children may do less well at

school than their better-off classmates.

4. Is the proportion of children living in poverty higher in the

UK, or in Japan?

5. Does the writer agree, or disagree, with Joseph Stiglitz?　　

ライティング力アップ講座として
時事英語の文章を読み、それに関するエッセイの添削を
ネイティブスタッフのロジャー先生（イギリス人・オックスフォード大学卒業、東京理科大などで長年指導、翻訳業にも長く携わる）
に依頼していますが、

この１年に提出された100本のうち、ロジャー先生に優秀なエッセイを選考していただき、見事10本が選ばれました！

★★★　最優秀賞　TOP THREE　　３本
★★★　優秀賞　　RUNNERS-UP　６本
★★★　オリジナリティ賞　COMMENDATION FOR ORIGINALITY １本

《　ロジャー先生　講評　》

エッセイコンテストにあたり、これまで添削したエッセイを読み直しながら、
皆さんの英語力と努力に、あらためて感心しました。

時事英語の内容はかなり難しいものもあったと思います。

選考は、
・エッセイが論理的にまとまっているか
・その内容
・トピックに対する関心がどの程度向けられているか
・説得力があるか
等に基準をおきました。

こういったポイントが、ただ質問に答えているだけのエッセイと、
読者に感銘を与えるエッセイとの違いを生むのです。

当初はトップ５を選ぼうと思っていましたが
同じくらい素晴らしいエッセイが多かったので
選考に苦労しました。
まずトップ３を選び、次いで甲乙つけがたい６本、
そして「オリジナリティ賞」を選んで10本と致しました。


～～　今後、優秀作品を発表していきます　～～

中２なのに、こんなエッセイが書けています！
多摩センター校の中２生K.Nくんです。

中１の時に英検準１級にも合格しています。

「プラスチック廃棄物による汚染の問題に対し、日本政府は何をすべきか」という時事的な問題に、ロジカルに提案しています。


トピック：
In your opinion, what actions should the Japanese government take to solve the problem of plastic pollution?

I think Japanese government should make a new rule about throwing a plastic materials to the enviroment. Also they need to make a board and warn that throwing a plastic or other kinds of trash to the enviroment is same as committing a crime.

First Japanese government has to make a rule to stop littering trash in public places. For example, if you throw 100g of trash you need to pay 1000 yen. To stop people throwing trash in eniviroment, we need to make more trash can in the sea, forest, or etc.

Second is that they should make more board and put them on place that people could see very clearly. They don't know how much plastic were thrown away in 1 day. So the government can reaserch them and put the broad that has singnificant numbers.

Reducing plastic trash from enviroment is very easy if each person tried to take home a plastic trash not throwing them in any place. We need to think about plastic problem more seriously and government has to do their best to present eniviroment from plastic.

ウィングローブでは、特に高校生には、
時事的トピックに関するessay　を書くよう奨励しています。

今回は、'Overwork'　に関するエッセイを読み、

In the future, would you rather work longer hours (more hours a week) and earn more money, or work shorter hours (fewer hours a week) and earn less? Give reasons for your choice.
というトピックで高2生が書いた作文を紹介します。

K.Y.くん　高２　岸町校

I think Japan should follow Germany and France to reduce the number of working days and hours. I have two reasons. First, if people work harder, they may be promoted and earn more money. But, they will lose time to spend the money on their family, hobby and so on. Second, long-time and hard work does not always make more profits because it is by no means efficient. The employees of a successful company seem to work, taking their time, and enjoy their tasks. Some of them even reach their office 9 a.m. and finish working 5p.m., and then go home. For these two reasons, I think Japan should make efforts to cut down on the number of working days and hours.

Y.Y.くん　高2　岸町校

I think overwork is the production which modern society generated. Recently most parents think their children never succeed if they cannot have good jobs. So these parents make their children study hard. These children are certainly clever, but are so tired physically and mentally that they don't have enough power to work in strict competitive world in a company. However, on company's side, it is important whether employees are competent or not. They don't care about their mental condition or relationship to others. I think overwork problem is born from the difference between employees and companies.

Companies should know employees more deeply and make good working condition for them. Some European countries have already introduced reduction of working time. Although company's turnover reduces, the company will be more successful in the long run. I think how fulfilled employees feel in their life is far more important than how companies prosper.

ウィングローブでは在校生向けに
「ウィンコム」という英文ネイティブ添削サービスを行っておりますが、
最近、高校生のなかで定着しつつあります。

大学受験や英検にも必要ですが、
「書いて内容を伝えられる」ことは
「英語が使える」ということです。

以下は、添削後の英文ですが、
素晴らしい内容です。

トピック：　Basic Income　という考えをどう思うか

I am against the idea of basic income, for the following two reasons.

First, the idea of basic income itself is good, but it is not realistic. Introducing basic income would mean reorganizing the whole tax system. It would take too much time to gain the people's support.

Second, there is a possibility that basic income might contribute to financial difficulties or financial collapse. For example, France has a welfare system called Revenue de Solidarite Active (RSA). This system provides money to people on low incomes, on a means-tested basis, even if they don't have French nationality. Thanks to this generous system, unauthorized claims are rampant and it is a burden on the treasury. So, I would like to say that handouts from the government inevitably lead to people claiming benefits illegally.

For these reasons, I strongly believe that basic income should not be adopted.

（高田馬場校　高3生）

今回、「英作文選手権」！を企画しました。

普段、「ウィンコム」というサービスで
ライティングの添削が受けられるようになっておりますが、
今回さらにパワーアップです。

タイムリーなテーマの英文を、保護者・生徒への通信に掲載するので
そのトピックで英作文をして応募してもらい、
後日優秀作品を発表するというものです。

その元となる英文を、
現在ウィングローブのネイティブ顧問をしていただいております
ロジャー先生に書いていただきました。
ロジャー先生には普段、英作文添削サービス「ウィンコム」の
担当をお願いしております。

英国オックスフォード大学卒業、
東京理科大等で英語を長年教えられ
留学生の論文などを含め学生の添削を多数行ってきたロジャー先生は
あらゆる程度の英語を理解し、
非常に高いレベルの英語を使える方です。

今回ロジャー先生に、時事的なトピックをテーマに
英文を書いていただきました。
今現在起こっている問題についての事実とコメントです。
素晴らしい英文なので、みなさんに味わっていただき、
一緒に提示される'Composition Topic'に答える形で
英文を書いて添削を受けようというものです。

第一回のテーマは、'Overwork'　第二回は 'Child Poverty'　です。
第三回は'Basic Income'　という、
「経済三部作」となります。

日本の経済に鋭く切り込む内容に
ウィングローブの生徒たちはどう反応するのか？
楽しみです(＾◇＾)

在籍生徒対象　生徒の英作文を　ネイティブの先生が添削するサービスを開始！　
名付けて　WinCom（ウィンコム）　です。

よりよい表現を指摘してくれるなど、普段の授業では得られない指導を受けることが出来ます。
日本語での解説もつきます。

講師の先生は　：　

Roger Northridge （ロジャー・ノースリッジ） 先生 英国オックスフォード大学卒業 翻訳、教科書執筆、様々な分野の和英辞書編集に携わる。 東京理科大他、英語講師歴25年。 入試問題作成にも、数年携わってきた。 オリジナリティー溢れる授業は評価が高い。 趣味は山登り、読書、家の改造、旅。すでに50カ国近く訪れている。 現在山の家を改造中である。