ウィングローブのロジャー先生の添削は、

提出された生徒たちの英作文に対し、間違った箇所の添削と、この方がよりよい表現だよ、という２種の添削がされます。

自分では思いつかないすばらしい表現をアドバイスしてくれ、しかも元の英文を生かしながらなので、それを受け取ってよく読んで自分のものにしていくことを繰り返しますとライティングの力がメキメキと上がってきます。

横浜校　H.A.さんの英文を紹介します。

Aさんは積極的で、１１月にはエッセイを３件も提出していました。

Some people think that companies should promote workers on seniority, however I think that they should improve employees on performance. I have two reasons for this.

First, companies need to assess fairly regardless of age. It is true that hiring experienced people is important, but I believe that not every experienced person has great ability. In other words, young people can work well without enough experience.

Second, companies had better to attract motivation to work. If companies introduce the wage system based on seniority, young workers tend to discourage. Also, they are unwilling to improve or put more effort into their tasks. I think that it is a bad circulation.

For these reasons, I suggest that companies should promote workers on performance.

井土ヶ谷校・高１のR.Y.さんの英文をご紹介させていただきます。

内容が楽しめる、よくまとまっている英文ですね。

TOPIC:　Diet and Health

To urge people to stop eating fast food is the best way to encourage people to have a healthy diet but it’s so difficult. People all over the world like fast food because it’s cheap and delicious. To tell the truth, I like to eat it, too. We can’t give up eating them.

I’ve heard an interesting story. One fast food restaurant started to provide the new type of hamburgers. For example, the hamburgers with lettuce instead of buns. There are also hamburgers with “soy meat.” They are healthier than those of regular type. I want to recommend them to everyone. You can enjoy fast food and be healthier.

Recently, many people have a lot of work so they have no time to eat well-balanced diet. I think depending on fast food or processed food is not always bad, but we have to change our life little by little to keep our health.