英作文力は、一朝一夕につくものではないですね。

「英借文」とも言いますが、

文法力も磨いて、正しい文法を使えるようにすること、

語彙力・表現力をアップして、場面に合うものを選べるようにする、

ということが必要ですね。

高１でこの英文が書けるのは立派です。

高い英語力を培っている印象です。

＊北戸田校　津久井　陽仁さん　（高１時）　　

※下線部や (  )は添削が入った部分です

トピック

Should companies in Japan take action to reduce plastic waste?

I think companies in Japan should take action to reduce plastic waste. I have two opinions.

First of all, reducing plastic waste is very important for us to improve environment. Recently, marine pollution (ここにcaused必要）by floating plastic waste become (has becomeがベター）a crucial problem. The plastic waste affects many marine creatures. There are companies that take action for (→are taking action to resolve) the problem. For example, McDonalds used to use plastic straws. But now, it uses straws made from paper. Starbucks also do (→has also made) this change. Because of the change, each company is able to reduce plastic waste. They help environment get better. Japanese companies should imitate these moves.

Second, the companies are able to improve (→reduce) excess packaging. Extra packaging is unnecessary. By changing (ここにto必要） moderate packaging, they could reduce plastic waste.

In conclusion, Japanese companies should take action to reduce plastic waste.

ウィングローブでは、英検の作文や、大学受験の作文などを

添削してくれるサービスを行っております。

くり返し利用することでレベルが上がっていきます。

浦和岸町校　Tさん（高２時）　　※若干添削修正しております。

I disagree that classmates and partners should communicate with each other face to face to finish the project better than by sending e-mails. There are two points for my opinion to make in this connection.

First, it is now possible to get in touch with each other more easily because the Internet has made progress recently. Almost everyone has their own smartphone or tablet. These enable people to communicate with each other without any cost.

Second, people can check the contents whenever they like. Every person has their own lifestyle. Also, when they must contact people who live in foreign countries, by sending e-mails, they do not have to worry about their partner’s schedule so much.

For these reasons, I disagree that classmates and partners should communicate with each other face to face to finish the project better than by sending e-mails.