Wincoｍという、ネイティブのロジャー先生が添削してくれる
ウィングローブの添削サービス ’Wincom’。
国立大学の受験前には、受験生たちがかなり利用しています。
尾木さんもその一人でした。
今年の春、見事、国立大学に合格しています。
さすがに文法的ミスは少ないです。
（※以下、赤字は文法的に直すべき箇所、緑字はよりよい表現としての添削です）
勝どき校 尾木 芯輔さん （高３時）
I think that old people should live with their families. Such a lifestyle has many benefits. I will explain the two main reasons for this.
First, it is hard for old people to live by themselves. Generally speaking, the older we get, the weaker our fundamental living capacity becomes. Given this fact, life becomes too dangerous for old people who don’t live with their families.
Second, it is good not only for old people but also for children. If there are a grandfather and a grandmother in the family, they can play with their grandchildren. Children will feel that it is fun and it will be good exercise for them.
For these reasons, I think that old people should live with their families.
