英作文力は、一朝一夕につくものではないですね。
「英借文」とも言いますが、
文法力も磨いて、正しい文法を使えるようにすること、
語彙力・表現力をアップして、場面に合うものを選べるようにする、
ということが必要ですね。
高１でこの英文が書けるのは立派です。
高い英語力を培っている印象です。
＊北戸田校 津久井 陽仁さん （高１時）
※下線部や ( )は添削が入った部分です
トピック
Should companies in Japan take action to reduce plastic waste?
I think companies in Japan should take action to reduce plastic waste. I have two opinions.
First of all, reducing plastic waste is very important for us to improve environment. Recently, marine pollution (ここにcaused必要）by floating plastic waste become (has becomeがベター）a crucial problem. The plastic waste affects many marine creatures. There are companies that take action for (→are taking action to resolve) the problem. For example, McDonalds used to use plastic straws. But now, it uses straws made from paper. Starbucks also do (→has also made) this change. Because of the change, each company is able to reduce plastic waste. They help environment get better. Japanese companies should imitate these moves.
Second, the companies are able to improve (→reduce) excess packaging. Extra packaging is unnecessary. By changing (ここにto必要） moderate packaging, they could reduce plastic waste.
In conclusion, Japanese companies should take action to reduce plastic waste.
