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横浜井土ヶ谷校 Tさんの作文（高１時）
Time vs Money、永遠の課題ですね。
配分をパーセンテージで表しているところが具体的でした。
※以下で（→）とあるのは、よりよい表現に添削するとこうですよ、という意味で添削されたものです。
Time vs Money
I would rather earn less money by working a little more (→shorter hours）than earn more money by working much time (→longer hours）
To begin with, to have fun using much money (→by spending a lot of money) is one thing; to play (→entertain yourself）without money is another.
If you have little time to play (for entertainment), you can’t use your money. Such a life means that you live to work. On the other hand, even if you can’t afford to spend money, you can enjoy doing something with your friends or by yourself, because you have time.
Nowadays, there are many entertainments that make you excited. Systems such as the Internet are very reasonable or even free. I don’t think that we need money to just enjoy our lives. The most important role of money is to let us live. Of course, to have much money is wonderful. However I feel time is more important than money.
When I get older, I would like to work at a company that gives me 60% of time and 40 % of money.
