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赤字は間違っているので直し、
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下北沢校 Iさん （中３時）
I do not think with the opinion that all people should be able to enter museums for free. There are two reasons for my view.
First, it is difficult to run a museum. If all of people can enter museums for free, museums get any money. It is hard to collect money to maintain the museum and pay salary for employees. Also, it is not easy to exhibit famous and valuable exhibitions.
Second, it increases a number of customers who are not interested in the museum and do not have moral. It makes angry people who enjoy the museum quietly.
In conclusion, entering museums for free is bad effect for both of museums and customers, so I should not be able to that.
（以下が添削された英文です）
I do not agree with the opinion that all people should be able to enter museums for free. There are two reasons for my view.
First, it is difficult to run a museum. If everyone can enter museums for free, museums won’t be able to earn any money. It will be hard to collect enough money to maintain the museum and pay the salaries of the employees. Also, it will not be easy to put on famous and valuable exhibitions.
Second, it will increase the number of customers who are not interested in the museum and do not behave properly. It will anger people who just want to enjoy the museum quietly.
In conclusion, entering museums for free will have a bad effect on both museums and their customers, so people should not be able to get in for free.
